Effective Paraphrasing

Here is how the passage could have read, with paraphrasing and appropriate citation:

Student Writer's passage:

Conditions on the Sioux reservations had deteriorated seriously within that two year period. Food shortages were severe; the reservations were under martial law; and there was constant pressure to join friends and relations in armed rebellion against the government.¹

¹ Helen Hunt Jackson A Century of Dishonor: A Sketch of the United States Government's Dealings with Some of the Indian Tribes New York: Harper, 1881, p. 178.

Source passage:

Contrast the condition into which all these friendly Indians are suddenly plunged now, with their condition only two years previous: martial law now in force on all their reservations; themselves in danger of starvation, and constantly exposed to the influence of emissaries from their friends and relations, urging them to join in fighting this treacherous government that had kept faith with nobody &mdash neither with friend nor foe.

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